The second piece I’m presenting is actually the first thing
I had written for this class. I chose this piece of writing mainly because it
is the first piece I had written, and it shows exactly how my writing has
evolved since then. The concept of this piece was that it was sort of an introduction
of my writing history and myself to my peers. I spoke about when I first began
writing and what I enjoyed writing about, which was video games and everything
about them. A good amount of the sentences I wrote in this piece began with ‘I’
or some variation of it, which I think disrupts the flow of the paragraph a
little. I feel I’ve improved in that sense as I try to vary the starts of my
sentences more often. It is a personal work, so it is expected that ‘I’ is used
often throughout, but there should still be variety at the beginning of each
sentence. This was obviously written before my “keep it simple” essay, so the
sentences are a little on the long side, but comparing this piece to my most
current piece, I can definitely see an improvement in that department.
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